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Post by Dûncariel is Dead. on Nov 25, 2005 20:32:57 GMT -5
So, review here... I don't care if it's nitpicky. I like it better that way, because then I can improved. Thanks!
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Post by Foral the Lazy on Dec 12, 2005 15:14:15 GMT -5
Wow...angst...I liked it. You did a good job on it. Wow. I really don't know what to say, it's just, wow. Nice work.
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Post by Dûncariel is Dead. on Dec 12, 2005 21:44:50 GMT -5
«snrk»
I just realized that I wrote 'because then I can improved'. Way to go, Dûn.
Thanks for the review, Foral... if you ever figure out what to say, please do...
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Post by Foral McDerson Windu DOOM! on Dec 15, 2005 20:47:50 GMT -5
Yeah, it's just one of those stories that after you read it, you can't get your thoughts straight. It was good. It was interesting how Death wasn't really evil when you get into his head. But that's the way with all villans. They don't really realize that they're evil 'till they change. It was shorter than the first one. Was this just an extension you came up with, or more of the dream?
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Post by Dûncariel is Dead. on Dec 17, 2005 15:38:39 GMT -5
An extension. The dream was longer than the first story, because I had to cut a lot of it out, but it mostly had to do with the main character running about in this building trying to catch up to Death, so it wasn't really story-worthy, anyway.
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Post by Morgana Le Fay on Dec 17, 2005 16:48:26 GMT -5
This was good. Very dark, but also shows the human qualities of your worst enemy, that they're just human too....
I'll put more later. I have to read it again. But it's good.
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Post by Foral McDerson Windu DOOM! on Dec 19, 2005 11:04:56 GMT -5
Yes! Thankyou Dragoness! That was what I was trying to say, but I couldn't really get what I wanted to say straight.
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